I can't unsee it now! D:
Your demo is all well and good, BUT Intro Mom says it's almost 8 o'clock, while the kitchen clock actually shows that it's only “almost 6 o'clock.”
Now I have questions!
Is my mom lying to me? Is the kitchen clock broken? Is there some cosmic time shift that I just can't comprehend? Or do I just have a problem with numbers AND can't read the clock without numbers?!
This inconsistency is driving me crazy! Help! (´Д｀)
You are very welcome! ♡
And thank you so much for your lovely message! (˘︶˘).｡.:*❤
(I'm sorry I'm only now getting around to replying.)
Also, I've seen that marblestorystudio has given you a few codes regarding fonts. :DDD - Yay!
So I really hope they are useful to you in some way and that you'll do a lot more magic with Sugarcube in the future!
I can imagine that everything is still super complicated at the beginning but I'm sure you can manage it, with enough time and effort!
I will definitely be rooting for you and your story!
[And for 'The Kestrel' inside your Story, who - you are so right! - will definitely become popular! ¯\(◦‿◦❀) It can't be any other way!]
Aaand I looked at the screenshots already! Your new UI looks really nice so far and definitely easy to read!
Have a super nice day, drink some delicious coffee and take care! ✿
Hello there spoiledsweet, (◍•ᴗ•◍)❤
I just wanted to leave a little comment for you, since I was in the mood and you wrote "I'm open to all advice and critique" at the end of your demo.
Sooo here I am. And I'll just start with the very first thing, that I noticed and that made me discover your "The Second Sight" - demo in the first place.
It actually was your 'story-cover-icon-thingy' when I was searching itch for new, potentially good IFs to read. It's simple but really, really nice to look at. It's also easy to read the title and it kind of caught my eye in the truest sense of the word. ['cause you know... the little fancy mystical eye in the center of the picture. Haha... yeah. I'm aware. I'm not funny at all. ._.]
Nevertheless I love it! ❤ - Eh, the eye not my joke.
What I also love is your color choice in terms of font and background. Not too bright, not too dark and still with enough contrast.
Also, there was never too much text in a passage, so I never felt like I was being crushed by words :D
Believe me, it's a blessing when someone can gauge how much text per passage makes sense.
I think you're already doing a lot of really good, reader-friendly things and I haven't even said, what I think of your writing at this point.
But, since I'm sure many readers appreciate the fact that you've put as much thought into the design of your story as you have into its content, I wanted to put this praise into words.
And now, finally, I shall also get to the content in question! :D
Although your demo wasn't too long, it still managed to captivate me and make me wonder what happens next.
- What can be learned about the main character's past?
- How much will the player's future decisions affect the story?
- What will the other characters be like? [For that matter, I'm probably already a Kestrel-fangirl, I kinda feel it. (˘︶˘).｡.:*♡]
So even though I haven't been able to read much yet, the setting and text already makes me want to read more. And that's just so precious.
Therefore I really hope you extend your demo someday and, of course, manage to finish your story alltogether.
First and foremost for yourself ❤ - as you certainly have your own motivation to write - and secondly for all your future readers.
By the way, I will definitely be one of those future readers and I will wait patiently for more updates and content.
I wish you lots of success, support and fun writing!
I am sure you can do it! (❀•ᴗ•)/
And last but not eh... but definitely the least:
It's kind of a "me"-problem and actually not worthy of criticism.
[B u u u u u t [!] ← It's one of my drama-"but"s. Obviously.]
I just have a personal ongoing and very fierce battle with some fonts, that have ugly serifs. And so I have to talk about it. I must talk about your current font-choice. It is one of my arch enemies! Not the worst, but still the kind of squiggly font that is just not pretty! - So maybe it's possible to program an option to choose a font with other serifs? Or without serifs at all? Just a thought that came up, because I was struggling.
But I have no idea how complicated something like that would be, so I will leave it at that. Others will not have the same personal problem as I do.
So, thank you so much for reading my comment, for beeing creative and for blessing itch with your demo and story.
Have a really nice, beautiful and enchanting day! ❤
Also, have an imaginary cookie before you start your day. [Or night.]
And all the others, not named spoiledsweet, who have also read this wall of text, are hereby given an imaginary cookie too!
An organic one with chocolate! Gluten,- lactose,- and calorie-free!
Incredibly delicious! It may even bring luck.
P r o b a b l y.
(☞ﾟヮﾟ)☞
